INTERNET


OUTLINE: THE INTERNET PROVIDES SO MANY CONVENIENCES FOR MODERN LIFE BUT THESE ARE OUTWEIGHED BY THE DANGER IT PRESENTS.’ DESCRIBE SOME OF THE CONVENIENCES AND DANGERS OF THE INTERNET AND GIVE YOUR OPINION ABOUT THIS STATEMENT
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PARAGRAPH
CONTENT
1.
1st Paragraph
Consists of:
-          Introductory words and background of the internet
-          The function of internet both positive and negative
-          State that we will discuss about the advantages and disadvantages of using internet
2.
2nd Paragraph
-          This paragraph will explain about the positive side of the internet
-          I will be explaining about more about the function of the internet nowadays
-          Evidences / examples from successful person who learned by themselves through internet


3.
3rd Paragraph
-          This paragraph will explain about the negative sides of the internet
-          Evidences/ examples from someone who suffered serious illness because of the internet

4.
4th Paragraph
-          Conclusion on this essay
-          Write my ownstatement: “I think internet is helping us to know the world, but we need to be able to rule the internet, and now ruled by internet”
-          closing

            More and more people around the world will have the access to the internet everyday, to obtain lots of information throughout the world in Music, Sports, Celebrity, Politics, Fashion, etc. We know internet is very useful when it comes to the information because we don’t have to access it through newspaper or any other conventional ways to obtain the information. But however, we know that internt can be dangerous for people if it’s now used properly. This essay will be explore the advantages and disadvantages about the internet.
            The internet helps us a lot. When the government legalizes the uses of internet in some country, well it means that everyone can have an access to it, so in order to gain some slides, e-books, module, etc, we can just try to dig deeper about some information that will be useful in the future for our own. Then, I think internet is actually helping someone to communicate overseas through social media such as Facebook, Twitter, Instagram, Whatsapp, etc. So we know that communication is absolutely important to all of us to be able to keep in touch with friends, family, girl/boy friend. Then, the internet helping us to build an online business or we usually called it “E-Commerce”, so this E-Commerce is one of the phenomenon caused by the appearance of internet. E-commerce allows people to order something via online to help them to use the time effectively. So the appearance of internet leads to a bigger change in the world.
            Internet can harm you. The bad effects of internet results in addiction to the internet because internet is too convenient and it makes people feeling good when they are using internet most of the time. The other things is that internet can cause social isolation because they are attached to it, so it needs more control to the person to be able to use the internet wisely. Then also the negative side of internet can cause sleep deprivation, when someone is using internet till the midnight, it will disturb their own sleep cycle so they can’t wake up in time and can’t maintain their own energy.
            In conclusion, we can see that actually internet is something that has positive and negative effects to the people nowadays. Internet can help people to be able to obtain a lot of information to be able to learrn something, but it can also harm people when they are using internet too much in a day so we just need to limit ourselves to be able to use it wisely. I think we should know that internet is a tool to help us to learn, search, dig something that can be useful for us, but we need to use internet as wise as possible to prevent something bad happens to us.

Komentar

  1. Hey, Enndi!
    I think your essay is so simple and very easy to understand. But, I may add a bit of suggestion.

    In your first line of your first paragraph, it would be better if you add an adverb first in the very first, such as 'nowadays', or 'in current world' etc to start the paragraph.

    Also for the 'but however', you could just pick one, no need to use both of the word heheheh, also a little bit of typo for the 'internet' heheheh. Also, "the internet can be dangerous for people if it's 'now'...?" I think you meant 'not'? hehe.
    Also, this essay will be *'exploring'.

    Second Paragraph
    adding "'well', it means...." it's a bit informal, so might as well just erase it.
    Also in the 'then, I think it isn't really suitable for academic writing. You could change it into a more 'objective' sentence without using the word 'I'.

    Overall, great essay! Keep it up!

    BalasHapus
  2. hello Enndi, good essay and thanks for the advice!

    BalasHapus
  3. The color of your outline is too bright Enndi, it is difficult to read the outline.

    BalasHapus
  4. I thi k for the correction just in the outline because its too bright

    BalasHapus
  5. Wow. It's great essay. And I can't point your mistake more than Jo... haha

    BalasHapus
  6. Nowadays, more and more people around the world will have the access to the internet everyday, to obtain lots of information throughout the world in Music, Sports, Celebrity, Politics, Fashion, etc. We know internet is very useful when it comes to the information because we don’t have to access it through newspaper or any other conventional ways to obtain the information. However, we know that internet can be dangerous for people if it’s not used properly. This essay will be explore the advantages and disadvantages about the internet.
    The internet helps us a lot. When the government legalizes the uses of internet in some country, it means that everyone can have an access to it, so in order to gain some slides, e-books, module, etc, we can just try to dig deeper about some information that will be useful in the future for our own. Internet is actually helping someone to communicate overseas through social media such as Facebook, Twitter, Instagram, Whatsapp, etc. So we know that communication is absolutely important to all of us to be able to keep in touch with friends, family, girl/boy friend. Then, the internet helping us to build an online business or we usually called it “E-Commerce”, so this E-Commerce is one of the phenomenon caused by the appearance of internet. E-commerce allows people to order something via online to help them to use the time effectively. So the appearance of internet leads to a bigger change to the world.
    Internet can harm you. The bad effects of internet results in addiction to the internet because internet is too convenient and it makes people feeling good when they are using internet most of the time. The other things is that internet can cause social isolation because they are attached to it, so it needs more control to the person to be able to use the internet wisely. Then also the negative side of internet can cause sleep deprivation, when someone is using internet till the midnight, it will disturb their own sleep cycle so they can’t wake up in time and can’t maintain their own energy.
    In conclusion, we can see that actually internet is something that has positive and negative effects to the people nowadays. Internet can help people to be able to obtain a lot of information to be able to learrn something, but it can also harm people when they are using internet too much in a day so we just need to limit ourselves to be able to use it wisely. I think we should know that internet is a tool to help us to learn, search, dig something that can be useful for us, but we need to use internet as wise as possible to prevent something bad happens to us.

    BalasHapus
  7. hey endi i like your essay and there is some little typo in the first parahraph after "but however" there a typo from internet to internt

    BalasHapus

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